okay im writing a new book and i want you guys to judge it so far. this is just like the first page or somthin. im looking for how it flows, etc. yeah basicly the book is about a young fur who lives in a secluded island with his tribe until he hears the call of God and he goes out to search for God. so now i will post the firt page.
Eagle and the Quest for Truth
We start out on a small island in the middle of the Quanatic Ocean, with a young boy by the name of Eagle sitting in on the beach looking at the ocean. Then S'Drassa his sweet heart come up to him.
S'Drassa: Eagle come on the elder wants to see you.
Eagle: why me? All he asks me to ever do is fetch things for him. Why can't he do it him self?
S'Drassa: Eagle... I know how you feel but hes the elder here and you know what they say happens if you dont do what he says.
Eagle: yeah yeah. the gods curse you for it.
S'Drassa: So get going do you really want that to happen?, and besides once you do me and you will go down to the falls and...
Then a small boy comes running down to them
Boy: Eagle come quick the elder wants to see you.
S'Drassa: come on Eagle get a move on.
Eagle: alright then, im going. I'll see ya later.
S'Drassa: by Eagle.
Then Eagle and S'Drassa wink each other and then Eagle heads down to see the village elder.