First attempt at writing.

[Wolfie Zach† 0]

A wolf in human's clothing

 

            We peek into the room of your "typical" male teenager. A few guitars line one wall while a desk with an Xbox, PS2, and gaming computer sit against the adjacent. In the center of the room lies a single twin sized bed, your average looking teen sleeping on it. His red-almost brown hair a mess, his plaid pajama pants wrinkled and dirty, his brown sleeping shirt pulled up to his chest from a night of tossing and turning, a stuffed Garfield pinned to his chest by one arm, the other arm slid under his pillow. Next to him sits a simple brown nightstand, on it lies a cup of water, a TV remote, and his cell phone. Pretty average looking right? Well looks can be deceiving if life has taught you anything. Today we will peek into the daily life of this teen and see what secrets he holds.

            A soft murmur comes from the teen as a soft alarm emits from his cell phone. Groggily a hand comes up and slaps onto the night stand, searching around blindly for the source of the sound. His hand grazes the phone, the vibrating felt through his fingertips. He picks up the phone, draws the pattern to unlock it, and silences the alarm without looking, having done it so many times in the past. He lies there for a minute or two before letting out a groan. He lift his head up as he sets down the phone "Nine thirty as always I guess....even though I am on break" The bed frame would give a groan of protest as he sat up and swung his legs over the side, it was old but he didn't care as long as it did its job. He gave a long yawn before standing up and stretching. "Another day, another step closer to adulthood." He reached over and unplugged his phone from the charger, shot off a few good morning texts, deleted some emails,  and checked the weather as he slowly walked over to his desk. He hit the power button on the front and turned on his TV, a soft whirring coming from the computer fan on boot up.

            Now if you were looking at him while he did this it would seem like his form would flicker, almost like he was a moving hologram. With each flicker though, another form appeared for a split second. A bright teal, white, and neon green would appear for a millisecond or so before disappearing again. The teen would glance over his shoulder through the grogginess to look at the door, listening for a moment to make sure no one else was awake before letting out a sigh. A second later his form would flicker a few times before fading away, in its place a complete different person standing in his place. Well, person wouldn't accurately describe it, more like a complete different being. In his place stands what resembled a wolf with angelic looking wings. His fur a bright teal paired with a snow white, the patterns matching a husky pattern with the colors. A smile would creep across his face as he stretched out his wings to their limits. Each wing tip touching the opposite wall, glinting in what little sunlight filtered through the blinds from his four windows. "Ahhhhhh, much better. It's so taxing to keep up that disguise all night, but better safe than sorry I guess." His wings would tuck themselves against his back as he turned around. Long, neon green, and messy hair covered half of his canine face. A paw looking hand would reach up to scratch his head as walked across his room, slid open his door, and stepped out into the silent house.

            Now you see Zack for what he truly is, but what is he exactly? That is the question now. Now you see that looks, especially in today's world, can hide a great deal of things. Should we follow him further to find out more of his story? The decision rests upon your shoulders now.

 

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So yeah, that was my first attempt at writing a story ^-^; do you guys think I should continue the story?

 

 

[Timber LuckyFox† 0]

Most definitely! From part I, I can tell that you have tremendous amounts of talent in writing. The story flowed well, was descriptive, and was enjoyable. Looking forward to Part II!

[LuckyDragon† 0]

I enjoyed it, keep it up!

[Lu-Man† 0]

Good descriptive work. So many questions left unanswered. Hope you will continue this story

[Direlda† 0]

You should keep writing. ^^

 

It's an interesting premise you have and I am interested in seeing where the story goes next.  However, there are areas where improvement could be made (I speak as someone who has taught creative writing).  I won't go into depth, as you have not requested critique.

[Lu-Man† 0]

You taught creative writing?

 

I should hit you up sometime.  I could use some creative writing exercises.

[Direlda† 0]

Yes, I have taught creative writing.  I co-taught an informal class for adults at a homeless shelter.  And I taught a formal class for secondary students at an international school in Korea.