Landrav† 0 Report post Posted May 30, 2011 Hey guys, I just posted my latest story to FA. Orientation Session This one is set in a world where you can buy surgery to become an anthro, and they offer an orientation class with a video on how to fit in as an anthro. But what would happen if you skipped the class? Could you anticipate all the things which will be different? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Guest Wolfin Report post Posted May 30, 2011 I'd highly recommend replacing some of the several repeated instances of the characters name with an occasional He or His, the writing is kinda bumpy to follow because of that and feels unnatural. Just a tip Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
koshi† 0 Report post Posted May 31, 2011 Pretty good writing I don't think I would get that surgery if it actually could be done - I still feel like God gave me a human body for a purpose. I used to wish he'd given me (this is a little embarrassing to admit) a cat body, but two things stopped me from wishing that: 1) I was praying one day, and I asked God why He didn't do that, and He told me, "Because I have bigger plans for you than for you to run around in the woods hunting for food or being somebody's pet." 2) Cats live much shorter lives than humans. Okay, that was a little off topic. As far as anthro cats are concerned, I dunno if that's really wrong...but I still don't think I would do it, because it'd probably be wildly expensive, and I wouldn't ever want to spend that much money on outward appearance. I'm cheap enough with buying clothes as is Anyways, in case you couldn't tell, I really do like your story xD Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Landrav† 0 Report post Posted May 31, 2011 Robin, reading back on it I think some of my edits caused the name to come up too many times early on. I hate that effect, too, so I might consider going back for one more clean-up. Koshka, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Having a chance to become a foxtaur, I admit, is quite appealing to me. I'm realistic about what I can afford, but this would definitely make my list of things I'd seriously save up for if it were available :3 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Guest Wolfin Report post Posted May 31, 2011 Mmm, a new car or to have a really sexy tail... tough choice. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Carson Coyote† 0 Report post Posted May 31, 2011 I enjoyed this! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
